Monday, February 6, 2012

Concerns about Essay 1

  • Conclusion is too short and ineffective.
  • Descriptions of ads are too short.
  • More effective word choice could be used. 
  • Some of the arguments are weak.
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2 comments:

  1. Pluto ThoughtsFebruary 6, 2012 at 1:58 PM

    I think the paper was good over all, it just needed more details on the ads. I think you could have also included more information on the gum.

    I underlined a few statements in the paper because they were statement/quotes that stuck out to me,

    I only had a few question marks, because of grammar..but over all the paper was good.

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  2. Pluto ThoughtsFebruary 6, 2012 at 2:00 PM

    I also like the fact you chose 5 gum because its my favorite.

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